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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The world is struggling to curb the
usage
 of polythene and plastic bags as they affect the
habitat
 drastically. It is often argued that it is the responsibility of manufacturers and retailers to reduce the
usage
 of packing plastic and polythene bags while some argue that customers should deter to buy
goods
 which consist of harmful packing bags as they are not suitable for the
habitat
.
This
 essay will discuss both views and offer a logical solution.
First
 off, the sellers and producers should have a responsibility towards the
habitat
 by reducing large amounts of packing
materials
.
For example
, manufacturers should invest in reusable or bio-degradable
materials
 to pack their products.
This
 may lead to the number of harmful packing
materials
 going into the societies would be minimised.
Further
, it may
also
 create awareness among the general public and customers to reduce the
usage
 of harmful
materials
 .
On the other hand
, consumers
also
 play a major role in discouraging the use of harmful packing
items
. They may discourage the consumption of
items
 which consist of packing
items
 which are not conducive to the surroundings. It may reduce the revenue of large corporations that do not give enough priority to the surroundings.
As a result
, companies will be forced to change their packing
items
 to retain their customers. To sum up, producers and retailers should find eco-friendly packing
goods
 to pack their products and reduce the
usage
 of
goods
 which are harmful to the
habitat
.
Similarly
, consumers should reduce purchasing of
items
 from retailers who do not make an effort to reduce using harmful packing
goods
.
Therefore
, It is a collective action which should be taken by everyone in the world including consumers, supermarkets and manufacturers.
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