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Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Today, our lives are seriously affected by advertisements that surround us. I believed the advantages corresponding to
this
 phenomenon are more considerable than the minor disadvantages. On the one hand, a negative effect of
advertisement
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advertisements
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 on our lives may be encouraging
people
 to purchase unnecessary goods. Since companies are aware of
effects
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the effects
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 of advertising on individuals, they try to attract their attention
by
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 interesting and eye-catching
advertisement
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advertisements
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.
Therefore
, it is more likely that
people
 spend their money on buying useless
products
. Another perceived negative is that
advertisement
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advertisements
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 just focus on selling a brand.
As a result
, in many
cases
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 they do not consider themselves responsible for possible consequences.
For instance
, the health problems that society encounters by selling
cigarette
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cigarettes
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.
On the other hand
, a primary advantage of advertising is that it provides
people
 with some information about the
products
 that have recently been produced.
For example
, since technology is improving continuously ,
people
 should be informed about their new
products
.
This
 is where advertising plays a vital role in introducing
products
 to customers. And if the producers are oblivious to the importance of
this
 issue, they will face many problems to sell their goods. A
further
 benefit is solving the unemployment crisis. A large number of
people
 are working in the advertising industry, directly and indirectly. Tangible financial profit has encouraged private investors to put their money into
this
 section.
Consequently
, more
people
 are recruited in offices and
this
 helps to reduce the number of unemployed
people
 in
the
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society. On balance, it is true that advertising would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
, in my view, its positive effects in
term
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terms
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 of introducing new
products
 and decreasing
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate override the downsides. MEHDI DELJOU AC
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