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Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Today, our lives are seriously affected by advertisements that surround us. I believed the advantages corresponding to
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 phenomenon are more considerable than the minor disadvantages. On the one hand, a negative effect of
advertisement
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advertisements
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 on our lives may be encouraging
people
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 to purchase unnecessary goods. Since companies are aware of
effects
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the effects
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 of advertising on individuals, they try to attract their attention
by
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 interesting and eye-catching
advertisement
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advertisements
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.
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, it is more likely that
people
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 spend their money on buying useless
products
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. Another perceived negative is that
advertisement
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advertisements
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 just focus on selling a brand.
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, in many
cases
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 they do not consider themselves responsible for possible consequences.
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, the health problems that society encounters by selling
cigarette
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cigarettes
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.
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, a primary advantage of advertising is that it provides
people
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 with some information about the
products
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 that have recently been produced.
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, since technology is improving continuously ,
people
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 should be informed about their new
products
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.
This
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 is where advertising plays a vital role in introducing
products
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 to customers. And if the producers are oblivious to the importance of
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 issue, they will face many problems to sell their goods. A
further
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 benefit is solving the unemployment crisis. A large number of
people
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 are working in the advertising industry, directly and indirectly. Tangible financial profit has encouraged private investors to put their money into
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 section.
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, more
people
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 are recruited in offices and
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 helps to reduce the number of unemployed
people
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 in
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society. On balance, it is true that advertising would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
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, in my view, its positive effects in
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terms
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 of introducing new
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 and decreasing
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate override the downsides. MEHDI DELJOU AC

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