Some people argue that is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life.

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Having an enjoyable
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is the dream of everyone, having the pleasure to go to work and spend
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days doing something we like sounds amazing. Nowadays people want to have the perfect
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with the perfect
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to have the perfect lifestyle in order to be able to travel throughout the world, to have a good house where to live, to enjoy dinners out, but those jobs are hard to find. Some people believe that the most important is to have an enjoyable
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no matter how much the
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is. A pleasant
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means happiness on
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daily basis
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because it isn’t seen as
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job
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anymore, it’s seen as a ‘hobby’.
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the end of the
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everyone needs to have enough money to eat and
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pay their bills. It’s crucial to find a
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that we like and allows at least to ‘survive’ at the end of the month.
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, having a good lifestyle and
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a
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which
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us a comfortable life is
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important. In my point of view,
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topic is really personal, it depends from person to person; Some people prefer to have a lower
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and a pleasant
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as opposed to others who prefer to have
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work which isn’t
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ideal but allows them to have a better quality of life. To sum
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the best of both worlds is to find a balance between a
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we like where the
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is high enough to
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have a good life.
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