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Some people argue that is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life.

#people #job #money #salary #life
Having an enjoyable
job
 is the dream of everyone, having the pleasure to go to work and spend
the
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days doing something we like sounds amazing. Nowadays people want to have the perfect
job
 with the perfect
salary
 to have the perfect lifestyle in order to be able to travel throughout the world, to have a good house where to live, to enjoy dinners out, but those jobs are hard to find. Some people believe that the most important is to have an enjoyable
job
 no matter how much the
salary
 is. A pleasant
job
 means happiness on
our
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 daily basis
,
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 because it isn’t seen as
job
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 anymore, it’s seen as a ‘hobby’.
However
,
in
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 the end of the
month
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 everyone needs to have enough money to eat and
to
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pay their bills. It’s crucial to find a
job
 that we like and allows at least to ‘survive’ at the end of the month.
On the other hand
, having a good lifestyle and
having
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a
salary
 which
grant
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 us a comfortable life is
also
 important. In my point of view,
this
 topic is really personal, it depends from person to person; Some people prefer to have a lower
salary
 and a pleasant
job
 as opposed to others who prefer to have
a
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work which isn’t
the
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ideal but allows them to have a better quality of life. To sum
up
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 the best of both worlds is to find a balance between a
job
 we like where the
salary
 is high enough to
a
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have a good life.
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