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ost countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects. What problems are caused by international tourism? Solutions to change negative attitudes?

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For the
first
 time since 2010, we are observing the growth of the housing market is slowing down. It is worth noting
that
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how the
inflation
,
interest
 rates and lower growth in wages are reducing the hype of
of
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property
 markets
comparetively
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comparatively
 slower than it was before. The recent
property
 market emphasises
on
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how homeowners are backing down to buy properties as a reason
of
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for
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inflation
 and a sharp rise in
interest
rate
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rates
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. According to
corelogic
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CoreLogic
, people are holding their deposit for a better price at the
property
 to reduce the amount of mortgage in the long run.
Therefore
, those who wanted to sell their properties are
in
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desperate and a result of putting in an auction as quickly as possible before the price drops in
whole
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NSW
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of NSW
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. Experts are estimating that the prices for
property
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 will not go down as drastically as some of us are expecting. To rule out the
prices
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 changes, a lot of banks are offering good
interest
 rates when the deposits are more than Lenders
Morgtage
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Mortgage
Interest
 (LMI). A competitive
interest
 rate with higher deposits
are
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 in demand for those who weren't able to purchase the
property
 in December - January 2021-2022. In relation to
inflation
, people are backing off to spend
in
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anywhere but grocery shopping. Expertise
believe
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 that the
interest
 can go
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up to
upto
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up to
 7
percent
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per cent
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 where
inflation
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the inflation
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 rate is at 6.1
percent
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per cent
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 and the wages increased
into
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 2.6
percent
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. These reasons are creating a confluence of factors by eroding the demand for purchasing the properties
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