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Many people use written language in a less formal and more relaxed way. Why? Does this development have advantages and disadvantages?

#people #language #development
In my
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 opinion, I strongly discover the phenomenon that many
people
use
 written
language
 in a less formal and more relaxed way is significant. As
the
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technology is improving,
people
use
more
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social media to talk in a casual way easily, which is a large variety compared to
people
's ways of talking now and
then
. Mentioned to the point that
people
 talk in
informal
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 method. In my view, there are
few
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 advantages and disadvantages. The former is that
people
 feel
more
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free to be themselves due to expressing more creative and
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noticeable
noticable
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 suggestions rather than hiding their real personalities only to be polite to the manager.
Nonetheless
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 about
disadvantages
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that less formal written
language
 may be an uncomfortable message for supervisors. In conclusion, those advantages and
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disadvantages
disadvantes
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disadvantages
 depend on
different
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style
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 you treat and interact with other
people
 and
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demonstrate
demostrate
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 respect in various ways.
Therefore
, the point that
people
use
 written
language
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whether
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formal or informal ways depends on
different
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the different
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style
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 you interact with other
people
 is the main reason to affect the topic.
For example
, when you
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write
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 an
envolop
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envelop
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 the words 'thanks a
lot'
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instead
 of 'thank you very
much'
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, or even appearing
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 internet
language
 'lol' and 'lmao' to your supervisor who is bossy and difficult to be close with other employees, they may feel disrespectful.
On the other hand
, if you
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 an adorable poem and draw a cartoon face
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 your best teacher and said 'Happy teacher's
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, he/she will be surprised and grateful. All in all,
people
 using written
language
 in
informal
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 way may be true, but it still depends on the identity they desire to express
to
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. The point of the topic has positive and negative aspects.
Hence
, the most important idea is to
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 method to illustrate the target you want to convey.
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  • informality
  • digital communication
  • texting
  • social media
  • instant messaging
  • generational shifts
  • brevity
  • personal expression
  • language standards
  • erosion
  • interlocutors
  • emojis
  • internet slang
  • academic contexts
  • language learning
  • misunderstandings
  • language teaching
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