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Most countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects. What problems are caused by international tourism? Solutions to change negative attitudes?

Nowadays
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 tourism has been changing to the negative side by damaging natural and social heritage.
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 now the hottest issue all around the world because it causes several
destructions
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forms of destruction
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including
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, including
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 forest fires, river pollution, and air pollution. In my opinion, we can prevent these problems and change the
mean
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means
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 of enjoyment that people acquire from tourist destinations. In
this
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 essay, I will give some examples of side effects
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apply
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 and solutions to reduce
that
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those
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 issues.
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, it may contaminate
nature
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due to
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 the plastic and other types of rubbish made by travellers. It has a negative effect on both flora and fauna
which
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 are the main parts of
nature
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. Recent experiments on the environment have shown that almost 30%of pollutants were nonlocal guests. They use the means of plastic and they hit it wherever they want.
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, Kyoto province in
japan
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Japan
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 has been ruined by sightseers, which had a stunning view about two years ago.
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, individuals who
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 tours
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forests and these types of wooden places are facing widespread fires which start from tiny
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. One example of it can be the Amazon forest fires
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, which
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 destroyed the natural habitats of endangered species.
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 these problems are causing a lot of disasters in
nature
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, I believe that we can stop them by making people aware of
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 incidents and printing booklets that illustrate the bad conditions of
nature
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 affecting humanity. Another solution could be the creation of artificial facilities imitating snow tracks
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, which
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 are environmentally friendly
resembling
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, resembling
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 those in
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 cities as Dubai and Kuala-Lampur.
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, I once
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 that we can reduce the rates of damage by
making
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informing
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 people
informed
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about the value of
nature
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task
Plan your essay. Make a clear plan before you write.
task
State your view in the first paragraph and keep it in all your points.
coherence
Use a clear order in your ideas. Start with a line, then add details.
coherence
Use the same topic in each paragraph. Add clear links to show how ideas fit.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Use plain forms and simple words.
strength
You raise the idea that tourism can harm nature, not just gain money.
strength
You give two real examples to show the problems.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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