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Having more international sports events may promote world peace. It`s agree or disagree question.

#sports #events #world #peace #it`s
Actually
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 around the
world
, international sports events
are grow
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 very fast because
internet
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of internet
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 networks and social media evolution.
In addition
 to the entertainment
what
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the
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sports provide to the entire global earth in some
aspects
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 my opinion is
the
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that
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peace
 importance is above all the
world
 shows, because
that
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I believe the
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 of present events and scenarios can help to improve global
peace
 and give access to the interactive spots for all
human kind
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humankind
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 around the
world
. In comparison between the
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developed
developer
develope
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developed
countries
 and developing country in
first
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 case
are
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pacefully
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peacefully
peaceful
 because the people have more scenarios and sports shows all the time
however
 in the developing
countries
 are
less
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 shows and scenarios, that impact is make a big difference in the way how the
human kind
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humankind
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 perceives happiness and
peace
 personally. If the governments work together to help the rise of
that events
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that event
those events
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 in the poor
countries
, the kind of actions will be establishing a new way to share
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different
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differents
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different
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 forms
to
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of
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peace
 implements and
manteinance
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maintenance
 order and equality laws and
consequently
 grow the level
quality
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of quality
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 and
peace
. To conclude I
am agree
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 because
the
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sport is the fastest way to get
an
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equity between all the
countries
 in the
world
, no matter religion, social level, money and more.
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