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Some people believe that teenagers are facing more problems in their life than they did in the past and this is because parents are spending more time at work than at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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The illustrations demonstrate the expenses of a family in a week related to their
income
 in two years with
the
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40 year
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 interval. In general, the most proportion of their
income
 in 1968
expended
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was expended
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 on food;
however
, in 2018 leisure was the largest expense. Surprisingly, in both years household goods had the same percentage of their whole costs of living. In 1968,
although
 fuel and power
was
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were
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 the least costs with just 6 per
cent
 of all costs, the amount of money that needed to be expended for food was 5 times more
by
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than
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 35 per
cent
. In that year, household goods, personal goods, and transport were relatively the same about 8 per
cent
.
On the other hand
, in 2018 the spending
for
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 food in relation to 1968 significantly declined to just 18 per
cent
 of the whole budget. In the mentioned year,
although
 the largest proportion of all
income
 that
spent
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was spent
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 was on leisure
by
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the percentage of 23, the cost of fuel and power for the family was low just less than 5 per
cent
 of all
income
.
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