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Some people are of the view that students should keep a gap of one year without study between school and university. While others think it affects learning. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion by giving relevant reasons and examples.

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Actually, the new generations of students want to travel around the world between finishing school and
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university. On one side are a group of people who have the old idea, hard work all your life, and disagree
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 idea of rest and have a
year
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 ways of work and live,
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 they prioritize
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money above all the other personal things.
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other
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the other
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 side are the new generation
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of parents
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, who support the new ways to conceive
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future learning and how the young people want to gain their lives and get peace and happiness life
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 because they
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don't
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. Taking
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both points of view
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 is very important
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 younger
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 opinion because in the
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 I believe these
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 are who take the most important decision for their future. Is a fact when
the
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 school
gaduates
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graduates
graduated
 have a minimum
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time of one
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 to think about the
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different
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differents
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different
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 options,
no
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not
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 only about the university diploma
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but also
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many
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about many
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point
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 of view in some cultures around the world thing like
:
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 religion, food,
culture
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and culture
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. That information represents the big
first
 step to
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freedom in their mindsets. To conclude, all the things can do in the post-school
year
 is the best way to improve
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your degree
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choice
choise
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choice
 and
the
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 successful professional future, all the new experiences and
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knowledge
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 came in that
year
 of travel or
explore
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 is invaluable.
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