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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a concern that many minority languages may disappear. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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English, Spanish and Mandarin are spoken as common
languages
 in the world. In fact, these
languages
 help to communicate with people from other countries in daily
life
 and business.
However
, While some
languages
 ​​are predominant,
minority
languages
 ​​are disappearing. Some countries and governments are starting to practice
to protect
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 them, but I consider that we need to move more to protect
minority
languages
. One of the reasons I think
the
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languages
 must be protected is the relationships between historical cultures and local
languages
. It makes clear that
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language disappearing is not the only problem of Linguistics. Cultures are based on various things.
For Example
, their religions and nobility.
However
, I believe that If there are any differences, Cultures grow up with local
languages
. To back it up,
languages
 ​​sometimes have words with unique meanings that are difficult to translate. Protecting
languages
 is important for knowing and protecting History. As I wrote earlier,
languages
 have
specific
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meaning
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. I think it means there are many various values. I think the vocabulary and knowledge contained in
languages
 have a positive influence on us. We can say that it is a universal value for human
life
.
This
 is the most important meaning to protect
minority
languages
 in the world. In summary,
Minority
languages
 have many meaningful
vocabulary
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 which helps our
life
 and human
life
.
This
 is because they should be protected. We need to move more to protect and inherit
minority
languages
.
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