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Some people think the main reason for success is hard work and determination. While other people think factors like money and personal appearance are also important. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

#people #reason #success #work #determination #factors #money #appearance
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people
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 are aiming
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succeed
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succeed
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Although
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 believe that the main factor in
success
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 and
determination
, others think that money and personal appearance is the main point. In
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explain both
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views and say why
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 believe that both of them are important. On one hand,
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hard
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working
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 and
determination
 is the cornerstone for
success
. Those
people
 concentrate on themselves more than
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considering
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considering
 outer
factors
. In more detail, strong
wellingness
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willingness
 and working
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consistently
consistantly
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consistently
 are able to return talent to greatness but talent will not be
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considered
 greatness without hard
working
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 and
determination
. So, they believe in themselves and they stop complaining while others regard other
factors
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On the other hand
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considered
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consiedered
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considered
 by others as the backbone of
success
. They see that with money many problems can be solved and when you seem
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intelligent
intellegent
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intelligent
people
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you in
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factors
 become their
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priority
periority
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priority
instead
 of improving themselves.
This
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success
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 concept which can
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 in more
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competitive
 life. In my opinion, both of them
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have
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have a
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to
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factors
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the factors
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lead
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 to
success
. I believe that while external
factors
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considered
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considered
. So, the two
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 of
views
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complete
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 each other. With
determination
 and working hard
in addition
 to money and
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appearance
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appearance
appearence
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 your goals could be achieved
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easily
easilly
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easily
. To conclude, looking
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 issues in more detail with wide scope and regarding
all important
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factor
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factors
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 would make reaching
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success
 an easy
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process
procces
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