With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

Nowadays, as social media are constantly developing,
number
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of younger
people
using
social
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the social
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network
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networks
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without parental
control
is growing. Even though their intentions are harmful,
it
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can lead to tragic consequences.
However
, it can be avoided by
control
of
internet
use
and forcing
teenagers
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more face-to-face meetings with their friends. Progressing of
digital
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the digital
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world results creation of new apps for chatting and finding new acquaintances. Some of them can be not fully secure and young
people
are often the main targets for swindlers. Due to scientific research,
teenagers
are more susceptible to scams, while
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grown-ups
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grown ups
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are
under
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less risk.
Furthermore
, being more online active deteriorates young
people
’s social skills and
reduce
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reduces
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physical activity,
that
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which
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can lead to problems in
further
life.
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as
,
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absence
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the absence
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of
ability
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the ability
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to speak to
people
face-to-face and make friends as well as,
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle can lead to obesity.
Therefore
, parental
control
over children’s activities online should be supervised.
For instance
, banning
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the use
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of certain apps and websites would create
more
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a more
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secure environment for
teenagers
on the
internet
space. Another solution could be encouraging youngsters to perform more in real life, face-to-face with their friends. That would shorten
use
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the use
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of social media and reduce the risk of being treated badly on the
internet
. In conclusion, unsupervised online activities of young
people
can be unsafe. It would be a good decision for parents to take one’s usage of social media under
control
. As well as pushing
teenagers
spend
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more time outdoors would have a positive effect
for
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on
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them in terms of avoiding
negative
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the negative
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consequences of
internet
use
.
Furthermore
, it will help youngsters to improve their social skills and health conditions.
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