The charts below show the primary hobbies of the adult residents in a small Tunisian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given Pie charts illustrate how different the adults' primary
hobbies
are in a small town of Tunisian percentagewise
in the years 1980 and 2020.
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percentage-wise
percentages
Overall
, at the beginning of the period
the proportion of all Add a comma
,period
hobbies
was the same. In comparison, at the end
of the period
TV and movies made up the biggest part of the chart and video games were the least significant segment.
Tv and movies accounted for 14.3% in 1980Add a comma
,period
,
and experienced an increase to 22.9%
in 2020. At the beginning of the Remove the comma
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period
, books and working out both made up 14.3%. of the primary hobbies
, and these segments rose to 19% and 15.7% respectively in 2020.
Baking which comprised 14.3% percentage of the
adults' Correct article usage
apply
hobbies
in 1980, had a slight decrease of
1.41% in 2020. In 1980, Primary hobbies
outcome from gardenin
and video games both were at 14.3%, and fell to 9.6% and 5.7 % respectively after 40- Correct your spelling
gardening
year
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a year
period
. In contrast
, playing music remained constant in both years at 14.3%.Submitted by mohammadhoseineghlidos on
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