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Completing universities education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is frequently argued by many that, a
university
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education
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 is more important than personal skills and
experience
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, but some consider that, private skills and
experience
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 are vital for getting a good job. While
education
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 at
university
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 is useful in human life, I believe that developing and using personal skills are an alternative way to find a good profession. On the one hand,
university
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 knowledge and degree usually provide
people
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 with jobs.
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 the owners of
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 certificates are not well known, they can
work
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 somewhere.
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, some individuals say that a
university
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education
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 and diploma are helpful, even when
people
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 are old.
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, when
people
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 who have diplomas retire, they are given certain privileges by the state. And according to the opinion of the leaders of state institutions, in order to
work
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 in a better place or state institutions, individuals must have a diploma or certificate of higher
education
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.
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, they will not be given a job. Plus if
people
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 do not have diplomas it would be difficult to find
work
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 for them.
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, in spite of the fact that humans who own
university
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 degrees are not in difficulty getting jobs, well-educated and experienced
people
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 are never in trouble in process of working. Some think that
people
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 with good
experience
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 can solve problems easily.
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, experienced individuals are reasonable
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, they are often not afraid to start a new business.
Thus
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 many businessmen and
people
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 who have personal
work
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 are well-educated. On top of
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, despite the fact that
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people
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 do not have a
university
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 diploma, they always succeed in their own
work
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. And to my mind, being good experienced is more important than having a degree to do and manage any
work
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. To sum up, most
people
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 suppose that, completing
a
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university
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education
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 is good and profitable, while it seems to me, having well
experience
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 and knowledge is a more essential capability for many humans.

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