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Write a letter to the television channel Manager about boring programs during the day time. Tell him about the programs, give suggestions.

#television #channel #manager #programs #time #suggestions
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to request you to notify
about
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me about
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 the
channel
programs
 which are quite boring during the day time.
Also
, I would like to give you
recommendation
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a recommendation
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 about the
channel
programs
 which can be interesting to watch during the day period.
Firstly
, I would like to Congrats you
for
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on
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 your
channel
 to complete 50 years of broadcasting. Since
,
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apply
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 I am
subscriber
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a subscriber
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 of your
channel
from
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for
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past
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the past
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 30 years,
and
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I always loved the
programs
 and entertainment
you
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 broadcast.
However
,
from
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in
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 recent
few
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decades
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 I am finding
content
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the content
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 of the television series and
programs
 are very repetitive, and often boring
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especially
espicially
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especially
 in
day
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the day
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 time.
On the other hand
, as
a
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 old customer of
your's
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yours
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 I would like to recommend
to broadcast
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broadcasting
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latest
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the latest
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 content which
are
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is
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 good to watch and can
helpful
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be helpful
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 for kids and female
,
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apply
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 because they are the
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most
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mostly
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most
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 users at that time. To list
few
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a few
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 please telecast
programs
such
 as science and technology, cooking show, home and interior and movies which are suitable for kids and
family
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families
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. Consider
this
 as my suggestion and you will take
this
 as
a
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apply
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feedback. Hope you will take a
postive
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positive
 actions for the same. Thanking You
Afo
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