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Fossil fuels are themain source of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development and why.

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 origin like solar intensity, wind efficiency and hydroelectric power. In
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 is a positive or negative development. In the
last
 50 years the world is gone with the use of fossil
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 like oil and coal, and for a long time people thoughts that
this
energy
 didn't ruin our planet, but in the
last
 20 years we developed that if we don't change our type of spirit there won't be any future for our kids. Several people thoughts that we can go on for another 20 years with oil and coal; they think
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creating a sustainable development occur to reduce our carbon footprint and none the type of origin of power. The counterparts thoughts that alternative sources
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 we can change our future. To sum up I think
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