Computers do not help children learn more effectively. On the contrary, the use of computer's has a negative effect on children's physical and mental development. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays,
computers
play a major role in
children
learning.
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, they
also
affect the
children
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physical
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physical
and mental development. I completely agree with
this
opinion
children
are the backbone of every nation we must survey
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growth.
first
of all video
games
get the addiction to
children
. they play
games
regularly and the result is a lack of concentration in their studies
likewise
,playing outdoor
games
is reduced day by day because of video
games
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most governments banned PUBG
games
because of more addiction
this
incident clearly shows how addiction is .
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one of the most affecting causes to disturb the mental health of
children
is social media nowadays
children
just lay off their
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and just scroll
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news feed
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the
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fake news
this
causes
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the
children
and they lose their self-confidence. some of the benefits
also
show in their
computers
helps to learn new things easily and effectively In ,conclusion healthy and appropriate use of
computers
are
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acceptable and stimulating. parents monitor the
children
and set norms
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the usage limit and classing types of content do
children
enjoy the tremendous benefits of
computers
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Multisensory experience
  • Retention
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Cognitive development
  • Pedagogy
  • Digital literacy
  • Screen time
  • Interactive software
  • Online platforms
  • Physical health
  • Attention span
  • Social interaction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Mental health
  • Addiction
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