Computers do not help children learn more effectively. On the contrary, the use of computer's has a negative effect on children's physical and mental development. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays,
computers
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play a major role in
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learning.
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affect the
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and mental development. I completely agree with
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opinion
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are the backbone of every nation we must survey
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growth.
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of all video
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get the addiction to
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. they play
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regularly and the result is a lack of concentration in their studies
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,playing outdoor
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is reduced day by day because of video
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most governments banned PUBG
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because of more addiction
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incident clearly shows how addiction is .
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one of the most affecting causes to disturb the mental health of
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is social media nowadays
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just lay off their
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and just scroll
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news feed
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fake news
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causes
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complex
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the
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and they lose their self-confidence. some of the benefits
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show in their
computers
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helps to learn new things easily and effectively In ,conclusion healthy and appropriate use of
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are
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acceptable and stimulating. parents monitor the
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and set norms
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the usage limit and classing types of content do
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enjoy the tremendous benefits of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Multisensory experience
  • Retention
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Cognitive development
  • Pedagogy
  • Digital literacy
  • Screen time
  • Interactive software
  • Online platforms
  • Physical health
  • Attention span
  • Social interaction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Mental health
  • Addiction
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