Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society. Others, however believe that school is the place to learn this. Disscus both sides veiws and give your opinion.

It's argued that the
parent
is responsible for guiding his
children
to become valuable members of
the
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society
, while others think it's the
school
's
role
.
This
essay will discuss the impact of both parties on the
child
's upbringing.
Psychologist
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believe that for the
first
six months of an infant's life, they cannot distinguish between themself and their main care giver's, meaning they perceive as if they are one person.
Therefore
, the impact
of
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the
parent
can have on a
child
's manner and behaviour is of
a
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great significance. Since the
child
is conditioned psychologically to seek their approval and love, the
parent
's
role
comes to display, by showing affection, and appropriate
guidice
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guidance
they can help implement
acceptable
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manner in their
children
which to help them be of
a
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significance to
the
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society
. while the
role
of the
parent
is absolutely crucial, the effect
of
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society
cannot be dismissed.
Children
spent
considerable
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amount of time at
school
where
this
is their
first
interaction with the environment and
society
around them.
hence
, comes the
role
of
school
in a
child
's behaviour.
children
can learn how to behave and interact with each other in
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manner, while teachers help them navigate the challenges they face along the way, and learn to be
a good members
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a good member
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of
the
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society
. To conclude, both
school
and parents have a remarkable
role
in a
child
's positive contribution to
the
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society
. I personally Believe it takes more than a good
parent
to raise a
child
with
positive
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impact on
the
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society
, the
school
,
the
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environment, and the parents
contributes
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to the process and
enhances
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the overall result.
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