Car onwership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam.’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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The bar chart shows the population rates worldwide and wealth shares in various continents and nations.

Overall, the proportion of the total number of people in North America, Europe, and
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far lower than their distribution of wealth, whereas in other regions their population is higher than the financial percentage.
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, the richest areas are North America and Europe;
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, the poorest places are Africa and India.

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America, at nearly 7% and 34%, respectively.
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, China
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figure for global people at 23% and wealthy distribution at 3%.

The proportion of the total figure for citizens in Africa is 1 in 10, while the wealth level took the
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place, at only 1%. It is worth noting that the population rate in India is 15%,
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as those in Europe.
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financial figure for
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country is roughly 1%, while that
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nation is almost thirty times, ranked
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compared to other regions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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