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completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job.On the other hand other people think that getting experiences and developing soft skills is more important .Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that graduating from high university education is believed to be the most effective method to get work. While, others claim that,
experience
 and soft
skills
 are most important. In my opinion, while developing
experience
 and communication
skills
 are great graduating is more advantageous in getting work. Having a degree find a
job
 much easier. By having a degree employers and companies can find talents more easily, A person who decides to look for a
job
 rather than pursuing higher education is likely to have a chance to obtain a lot of real
experience
 and practical
skills
. On the one hand, some people argue that it is more beneficial for people to
experience
 soft
skills
 when they are working in a good occupation. The experiences of workers are an essential part of a
job
. A company employee may have a lot of
experience
 , but, not enough knowledge of other
skills
.
Furthermore
,Knowledge which in some jobs has to be cultivated is crucial and highly regarded.
Hence
, having good communication
skills
 is the key in an environment which requires teamwork.
In addition
, interviewing is a very skilled
job
. It is an interpersonal skill
that is
 extremely regarded by a boss or director. In conclusion, it is true that to say that, getting a career is important. There will be more opportunities and chances in finding a
job
. Even though developing
experience
 and co-operating
skills
 are great, alongside studying in university a person can change
also
 their idealogy or world-view .
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