It is now possible to order almost any item over the Internet and have it delivered to one’s home. As a result, people are no longer patient or careful in their shopping habits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Online shopping and home delivery
causes
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concerns that consumers may become hastier and less cautious.
However
, I do not believe that online shopping has
this
effect. In fact, I would say that the opposite is true. In
this
essay, I will discuss the reasons that online shopping actually helps shoppers make smarter choices. Internet shopping actually makes people more patient while they shop, not less patient.
This
is because, even with home delivery, online shopping is actually less “instant” than traditional shopping in stores. After all, if someone goes into a store, they can leave minutes later with the items they purchased.
However
, even the fastest delivery methods for online goods take at least a day.
As a result
, people are actually more accustomed to longer waits before they receive something they’ve bought. Not only does online shopping make buyers more patient
,
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it
also
facilitates careful, informed choices for buyers.
This
is because there is more competition between different sellers online than there is in a single store. If someone goes to a store in person, they will see a relatively small range of brand names, and they certainly won’t see the offerings of other stores.
In contrast
, online
customers
can compare just about every brand of any given product and browse the websites of multiple stores.
This
gives
customers
all the information they need to make the best possible purchases. When shopping on the Web,
customers
can learn patience because they must wait for their items to be delivered to them, and even more importantly,
customers
can access all of the information they need to choose the right items. Ultimately, online shopping is truly a positive development, not a negative one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • impulsive
  • hasty
  • physical interaction
  • careful consideration
  • informed decisions
  • reviews
  • ratings
  • patient
  • online shopping habits
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