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Many would argue that scientific research requires a degree of oversight from the relevant governmental authorities. In my opinion, properly handled, this is a sensible and necessary policy. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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The bar chart and table give information about a country's
export
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earnings
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 from five groups of
products
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 in 2015 and 2016. It is noticeable that
export
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 revenues in all but one of the five product categories increased over the period shown. While petroleum
products
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 were the
highest earning
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 exports in both years, the textile industry saw the most significant growth in
earnings
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.
Export
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earnings
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 from petroleum
products
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 rose from around $61
billion
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 in 2015 to $63
billion
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 in 2016, which was an increase of 3%. Income from engineered goods reached a similar level. The country’s
export
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earnings
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 from these goods went up by 8.5% to approximately $62
billion
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 in 2016. From 2015 to 2016, there was a 15.24% increase in
export
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 revenue from textiles, with
earnings
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 rising from roughly $25
billion
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 to over $30
billion
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.
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, there was almost no change in the amount of money earned from agricultural
products
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, which remained at just over $30
billion
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.
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, the only decline in income occurred in the gems and jewellery product group, where
export
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earnings
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 fell by around 5% to approximately $40
billion
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 in 2016.
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