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Topic: Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides

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The presence of
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 our daily life as we continue to rely on it for counting, resolving equations and much more. Some think that learning
maths
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 has no importance and
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 request that students do not learn it while others argue that it is indeed an essential subject.
This
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 point out why others believe learning
maths
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 is of the utmost importance. Many
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 the idea that learning
mathematics
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 is not necessary because once a student graduates from school, they are presented with several jobs, a handful of them not requiring knowledge of
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. An example of a job that doesn’t require knowledge of
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 is that of a driver, many
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 idea by arguing that a driver is someone who takes
people
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 from
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 point to another that could be through a vehicle or another mode of transport that uses the road and
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 they only need to know how to drive a vehicle and know the rules/codes of the road.
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mathematics
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 is very essential. They
support
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 ideology by arguing
maths
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 is widely used in our daily life.
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 whenever
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 makes a purchase at a store of a given item ($20) using cash and
assume
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this
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 person only has a $100 note, the cashier has to return
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 $80usd. In developed
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 a computer will process the equation and the cashier returns the amount displayed on the screen to the customer;
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, in some developing
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people
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 would choose to use their brains to perform
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 using several techniques they learnt while in
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 as addition and subtraction. That being the case,
people
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 strongly
support
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 the importance of taking
maths
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 classes. In conclusion,
this
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 the
one
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mathematics
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 should not be compulsory and
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 why
maths
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 is very essential in our daily life.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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