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These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. Do advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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Nowadays, folks change their career to another many times during their lifetime, and
also
 they have more than one job to work in. There are numerous advantages and disadvantages to working in many
jobs
 and changing them several times which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. As far as I am concerned the drawbacks outweigh the benefits. On the one hand, people who work in two or more
jobs
 usually have no time to relax and chill out.
Moreover
, as being up to their ears there will be no chance to travel and spend their time with their friends or family. On
this
 occasion, folks with low and unacceptable incomes ought to work in many careers. Sometimes the managers give them a very low amount of earnings, so they have to change their job to another which has a better income to pay their apartment rent or buy their requirements.
Also
, changing your job many times annually can make you become stressed as well as helpless.
For instance
, research by a student at the University of New South Wales has shown that a man with more than two
jobs
 got anxiety and all his life was full of stress due to high payments in Sydney, whereas those ones with only a career had their pastime, and hardly ever became stressful.
On the other hand
, not only is working hard to make life easier great but with life's adventures and
also
 relaxations.
For example
, working in two
jobs
 can make every person independent and make them handle every hard situation in their lives.
In addition
, it's notably helpful and can increase their communication rate.
Although
 it is somehow a little bit hard for introverted individuals to communicate easily with other people in society, working can help. According to what has already been discussed in the above paragraphs, there are many advantages and disadvantages to changing
jobs
 and hiring in many careers, while the cons outweigh the pros.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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