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Some people believes that children`s time outside of school should be fill with schedule activities such as art and music classes and sports others feels that childern needs free time to play and relax discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

#people #children`s #time #school #schedule #activities #art #music #classes #sports #childern
believing that
children
's
time
 outside school should be filled with scheduled activities like art,music and sport.others
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feel
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feel
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feels
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feel
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 that
children
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need
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need
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needs
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 free
time
 to play and relax.
This
 means that people are of different
opinion
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 but in
this
 case is good for
children
 to identify their talent on
time
,
children
 who were able to know go into art or music on
time
 have to start practising on
time
 to be a better person. for ,example
the
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apply
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Nigeria Messi who identify his talent on
time
 and develop it
was
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as
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 a great person,
secondly
 it
good
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is good
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 for
children
 to start practising with their following
children
 to be able to develop more skills and acquire more knowledge. so as is important for
children
 to relax after coming from school,it helps them relax and have full energy to start going again by
then
 start joining their friends to enjoy any kind of game they are well to learn. but right now is better for people to start learning when they are
child
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a child
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 it
give
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room
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them room
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 to know more about what they want.like in the society where we are living computers have taken over everything,so the
children
 who start operating a computer have value to compare with the who do not have access to a computer.because helps you to develop more and know what is happening in the world. In ,
conclusion
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 is good for
children
 to relax and have free
time
 to discover their knowledge.
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