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In many countries, paying for things using mobile app is becoming increasingly common. Does this development are having more advantages or disadvantages?

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Recently, every region has had an approach to for paying anything they purchase by mobile applications, surely, the community can use
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 manner as frequently as they what; they have different perspectives both views for judging
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 topic. personally, I think
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 method of paying for some things using an app can be made comfortable for many people.
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, there is someone who wants to buy a smartphone but the cost of the smartphone is so expensive. Exactly, they have enough money for buying
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 smartphone, but their feel so uncomfortable if they keep many banks in their pocket and hold it all the time. Because they may forget their pocket and leave it somewhere; fortunately, there is
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 method to save money for them and help them to be feeling comfortable and cosy.
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, some societies think the scheme is so easy to pay for and can encourage people to pay for something from online shops so easily too. If paying without consideration,
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 can be made many folks get dept and they could be poor people.
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, even though they buy things from online shops on applications frequently, these disadvantages do not exist if they have a clear objective to use applications and are sure about what they what to buy. In conclusion, there are more advantages to paying for things using mobile apps than disadvantages,
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 design can be a useful, cosy and comfortable thing to many societies nowadays, even if
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 mechanism may have some disadvantages for someone who does not have self-awareness.

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