In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents' home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a home with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

In today's society, I can see some value for young people who leave their
parents
' home after finishing their studies. Dosen't really
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if they will be renting or sharing a home with some aquantances but, the action of
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for independence
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realy
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really
counts in my
oppinion
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opinion
.
First,
taking care of a house is not
a
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easy
dutty
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duty
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and requires some maturity
that is
very hard to develop when you have someone doing those chores for you, like your Father or Mother. For
exemple
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example
, I have a friend
that
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is
on
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his 30th's and still
deppendable
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dependent
of
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his
parents
. in
addicion
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addition
, the opportunity to live by yourself can help a
youg
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young
person to grow and acquire more
responsabilities
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responsibilities
and it is good to have it sooner than
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later
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.
On the other hand
, when you
leave
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live
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with your
parents
you can save a huge
chunck
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chunk
of money that can and should be used for a down payment
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their first property.
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with your
parents
is very common
on
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in
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latin
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countries. The majority of people keep living with their
parents
untill
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until
they get married and it was not different with me. I came from a Brazilian family and around 8 of 10 of my cousins, stayed with their families
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time after
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and that included myself.
While
I was planning my wedding and started the process of looking for a place to live I
coluld
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could
stay with my
parents
and had all the support I needed to start my own path.
Overall
, I
belive
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that it is more about
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than a logical decision
however
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, now that I am living in North America I can see the advantages of leaving
their
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my
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parent house soon.
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