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Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree.

#prevention #cure #diseases #measures
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Nowadays, several kinds of
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 issues are extremely common and a number of communities believe that doing research as well as treatment for these diseases needs a huge amount of
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consequently
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 they suggest that if
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 possible to increase the investment in the process of prevention
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 it will save huge cost
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 used to spend on the cure. I completely agree with that opinion and
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 essay will show the economic point of view of a country and the
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 aspects of
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. To commence with, there are many
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 centres and
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 a
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 of medical colleges where government invest a
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 of
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for
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the treatment of sick
people
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. If government should invest that
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 in spreading the reasons and the obstacles
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 faced because of illness that will be much more helpful for
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 to understand.
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, if government spreads
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information about several kinds of diseases because of having a
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 of cigarettes or alcohol
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 many
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 will get aware of
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obviously
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 some will stop that.
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, individuals are recently a bit aware of
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 issues in that case if
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 do a
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 of
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 and by maintaining a healthy diet it is
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, an athlete doesn’t get sick as quickly like as a normal human being, because they always do regular exercise and they try to eat healthy food regularly.
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, they should try to avoid alcohol and
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 the main reason behind becoming healthy. Normal human beings should try to follow them. To conclude, governments should spread
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 on
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-related education by providing information to citizens about the disadvantages of diseases and
people
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 should take care of their
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 to make them fit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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