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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others, however, believe that it is a waste of money since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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A lot of people are trying to get their
information
 through the
internet
,
instead
 of going to the library searching for the
information
 that they need. Some people seem to find free
libraries
 a waste of money, but
it
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 that really the case? Are
libraries
 exchangeable with the
internet
? In
this
 ,essay the pros and cons of
libraries
 and
internet
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the internet
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 will be analysed to get to a conclusion.
Firstly
, I believe that
libraries
 and
internet
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the internet
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 are really not comparable. Even if it is very easy to find
information
 through the
internet
, it is just not the same way of researching.
Secondly
,
libraries
 are not only existing out of research reasons, but
also
 for free
time
. It's nice to go search through the library for a nice book in your free
time
.
Therefore
,
libraries
 are useful in different situations. On the other side, researching on the
internet
 is less
time consuming
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, and there is generally more
information
. So you get easier and quicker to the answers that you need.
Also
, fewer books need to get printed, which has a smaller environmental impact. In conclusion, by outweighing the pros and cons, I still believe that free, public
libraries
 are still very important and can't be exchanged by the
internet
. Both are important in some ways. But the nice and free
time
 aspect of
libraries
 should not be forgotten.
Therefore
, I think
libraries
 are still very important in
this
 society, as it is a very nice
time
 to spend your
time
 just reading. For me, they are not a waste of money
to
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 the government.
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