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All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty?

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recently
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rich
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people
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 over the poor, in the following essay I will describe the problems that it can
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 I will give some points of view on how to overcome the issues of
poverty
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 over the world.
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, when
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increase
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 the ratio of poor
people
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it
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cause
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 big issues not only for the
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government
goverment
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government
, if not as well, for the nation.
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, when the levels of
poverty
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increase
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nation
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nation
, the
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government
goverment
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government
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increase
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the
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taxes.
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, poor
people
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 can be helped by the taxes that the
gorverment
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government
colected
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collected
. In
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addition
additon
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addition
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other
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cause
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 is that if
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poverty
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increase
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 the levels of
education
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 decrease, as the
people
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 do not have
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enough
enought
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enough
 earnings to pay the
education
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, for examples countries
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 as Bolivia, Nicaragua the ratios of
poverty
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 are
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high
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hight
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high
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 and the indices of
education
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 are low. I believe that countries can overcome the problems of
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poverty
proverty
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poverty
 by investing in
education
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, if the
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government
goverment
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government
offer
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 free
education
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 and scholarships more
people
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 can access
to
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education
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then
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 once
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they are graduated, they can access
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better jobs,
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, they will receive better salaries.
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, the
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government
goverment
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government
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increase
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 the minimum salary.
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, the population can have more
earning
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earnings
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 and can spend more money, which can
cause
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the
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increase
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of
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 jobs.
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, we can see in countries like
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 that the minimum salary is
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high
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hight
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high
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 and the levels of
poverty
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 are low. In conclusion, when richer peoples are less
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that
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than
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 poor
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people
pleople
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people
 it causes many issues for a nation,
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, the
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government
goverment
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government
 of every country needs to help their nation in terms of
education
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, better jobs and better salaries to decrease
the
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poverty
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Income inequality
  • Wealth gap
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Marginalized communities
  • Impoverished individuals
  • Privileged elite
  • Disparity in living standards
  • Social stratification
  • Exacerbate
  • Living below the poverty line
  • Income distribution
  • Lack of access to basic necessities
  • Food insecurity
  • Limited healthcare services
  • Education barriers
  • Socioeconomic mobility
  • Resentment
  • Economic disparities
  • Resource allocation
  • Underprivileged
  • Vulnerable populations
  • Cyclical nature of poverty
  • Government intervention
  • Multilateral cooperation
  • Empowerment
  • Progressive taxation
  • Equal opportunities
  • Social safety nets
  • Unemployment rate
  • Corruption
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