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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#team #activities #skills #life
Recently, there is a discussion with regard to
activities
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the activities
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 of the
team
 and alone. Some
people
 believe that
team
activities
 can make sure
people
 gain more life
skills
 than do alone. As far as I am concerned, I partially agree with
this
 topic that
people
 can learn more life
skills
 for
team
activities
.
To begin
 with,
team
activities
 teach
people
 how to understand and
listen
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tolisten
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 other
people
. Actually, more of our daily
activities
,
such
 as sports
contest
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contests
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, university projects and jobs are performed within
in
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apply
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groups, which means that
people
 who join in these
activities
 need to socialize.
For example
, university students need to participate in lots of projects
that
is
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are
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 allocated to a
group
 of five
and
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or
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 six members, if young age
people
 share their opinions with each other in a
team
.
This
 will help them enhance
the
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their
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 social and communication
skills
 or improve their listening
skills
. What is more, leadership
skill
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skills
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 can be built by working together in a
group
.
For instance
, when students need to create a
group
, it must need a leader to arrange tasks for others, which can deal with things effectively.
Therefore
, working together is a practical method to help
people
 build leadership,
understand
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understanding
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 and
listen
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listening
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skills
.
On the other hand
,
people
 may remember some
skills
 better and become independent if they learn these
skills
 by themselves.
For example
, if
people
 needed to repair something,
such
 as
washing
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a washing
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 machine, table and so on, they watch videos related
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to these
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these
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this
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fix
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fixed
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 information and do it, which can help them remember and practice these
skills
. But if someone in the
group
 knows these
skills
, it is easy to turn to others for help and become dependent.
Thus
, working alone can teach
people
become
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to become
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 independent and remember
skills
 in-depth. All in all, more and more
skills
 can be discovered by performing in a
team
,
such
 as
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being understandable
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understandable
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understanding
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 and sociable, but it is
also
 good to do something alone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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