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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#team #activities #skills #life
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Recently, there is a discussion with regard to
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activities
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 of the
team
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 and alone. Some
people
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 believe that
team
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activities
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 can make sure
people
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 gain more life
skills
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 than do alone. As far as I am concerned, I partially agree with
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 topic that
people
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 can learn more life
skills
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 for
team
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activities
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.
To begin
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 with,
team
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activities
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 teach
people
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 how to understand and
listen
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 other
people
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. Actually, more of our daily
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,
such
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 as sports
contest
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, university projects and jobs are performed within
in
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groups, which means that
people
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 who join in these
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 need to socialize.
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, university students need to participate in lots of projects
that
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is
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 allocated to a
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 of five
and
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 six members, if young age
people
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 share their opinions with each other in a
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.
This
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 will help them enhance
the
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 social and communication
skills
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 or improve their listening
skills
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. What is more, leadership
skill
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skills
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 can be built by working together in a
group
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.
For instance
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, when students need to create a
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, it must need a leader to arrange tasks for others, which can deal with things effectively.
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, working together is a practical method to help
people
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 build leadership,
understand
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 and
listen
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skills
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 may remember some
skills
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 better and become independent if they learn these
skills
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 by themselves.
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, if
people
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 needed to repair something,
such
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washing
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a washing
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 machine, table and so on, they watch videos related
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these
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fix
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 information and do it, which can help them remember and practice these
skills
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. But if someone in the
group
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 knows these
skills
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, it is easy to turn to others for help and become dependent.
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, working alone can teach
people
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become
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 independent and remember
skills
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 in-depth. All in all, more and more
skills
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 can be discovered by performing in a
team
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,
such
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 as
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being understandable
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understandable
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understanding
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 and sociable, but it is
also
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 good to do something alone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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