Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sports. Why is it? Is it a positive negative development?

Nowadays, people’s life is depending on electronic products a lot like mobile phones, computers, TV, etc. The phenomenon

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that

children

spend too much

time

on electronic

games

and less on

sports

both positively and negatively has aroused

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wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people’s views on

this

issue in question may be, I believe that

this

has more likely to have a harmful impact. Regarding the positive side of playing

computer

games

, probably the most significant benefit is that it provides an experience you hard to find in the reality.

Computer

games

provide a different view of the world, the player can use a virtual character to enjoy the

fiction

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world with some ability or weapon

such

as magic, gun, sword, etc.

Children

can

also

feel a sense of accomplishment via playing the game.

For example

, most

computer

games

require

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player

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players

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to level up their virtual character. They usually start off easy but

then

the

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gradually increase and players can unlock other ability or equipment.

This

experience and sense of achievement make

children

splurge

time

on

computer

games

- even sacrifice

time

for

sports

. In my opinion, the aforementioned trend is without a doubt a negative development.

Children

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so much

time

sitting in front of the

computer

will jeopardize their health.

For instance

,

children

rather glue their eyes to the

computer

screen than

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participate in outdoor

sports

- obesity and cardiovascular diseases among

children

are not uncommon due to the lack of exercise. Not only are

sports

indispensable to their physical health, but they are

also

a crucial element in developing

children

's social skills. Many

sports

activities require teamwork like football, basketball and volleyball. Without those activities,

children

will lack

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practical

chance

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of

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social skills. Over

time

, they will avoid face-to-face

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with people.

As a result

, addiction to

computer

games

will excessively affect

children

physically and mentally. Under

this

link of thinking,

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good

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arguments in

favor

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of playing

computer

games

.

However

, it can be detrimental in several ways to the

children

.