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School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree

#school #children #computers #effect #skills #teachers #classroom #costs #study
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 of technology in the
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influence
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mankind.
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 of interactive and smart technology in
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educational establishments has negative effects
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 as loss of reading and writing skills among
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, that
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 of computers should be restricted during the learning process.
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, in my opinion, combining both technological and traditional ways of teaching will be double beneficial for school
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. On the one hand, the proponent of the argument that returning back to the traditional way of teaching
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, that working with paper and pen has
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 effect
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 the improvement of literacy of
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. It is undeniable fact, that when
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parts
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 of
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 begin to work together.
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,
students
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 are able to memorize how to write with comprehension and spell words properly.
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 the production of paper can lead to
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deforestation,
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 using gadgets is becoming beneficial in the classes.
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, the opponents of the argument claim, that in
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 era completely rejecting technologies at schools is impossible. Scientists recently have proved, that working on computers during
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study time increases
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 and critical thinking of
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 to
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generation
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 are more willing to learn something new with the
usage
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 of technological devices and apps, rather than
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a humble
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 blackboard and chalk
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 in the classroom.
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 to improve and keep on literacy skills
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 as reading and writing, teachers should use both modern and traditional methods. To sum up, even though in the modern world the level of writing and reading skills
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 among school
children
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 due to
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usage
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 of computers at schools. I believe that combining ordinary and interactive methods of studying will boost the knowledge and literacy of
students
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. (300 words)
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