Some people think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthily. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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want
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the government
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to increase the
tax
on unhealthy
food
, to teach
people
how to live without it and
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eat
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more healthy
food
. On the one hand it
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idea to make
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tax
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the
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unhealthy
food
or fast
food
.
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practice was used in Australia to avoid the bad
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most
people
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skooke
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smoke
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cigarettes
.
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big results. At nowadays 90% of
people
who live in Australia often do sport
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and eat healthy
food
. In my point of
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increasing of
tax
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anything can lead to big progress to avoid it among
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society. Of
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without fast
food
, it will be able to avoid other problems that
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to
the
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unhealthy
food
or fast
food
.
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fast
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become
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part of daily life for a lot of families and
people
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they didn't eat it every single day, but
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the
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holydays
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or other
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important
importan
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important
events like
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, or good passed
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exam
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. Eating fast
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the
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important event
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is like
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in Kazakhstan
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nowadays
,
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but is not
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purpose why
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should not rise the
tax
to
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the
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unhealthy
food
. In my
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the purpose that why
government
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the government
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did not do it yet
it
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is business. When
people
pay
for example
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the
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fast
food
resutaraunt
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restaurant
, all money
is not go
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is not going
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to the owners of
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restaurants
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the reustaraunts
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reustaraunts
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restaurants
.
Government
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The government
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is taking
tax
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taxes
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. They do it for
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everything
evrything
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everything
,
also
for fast
food
. Owners or
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restaurants
reustaraunts
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restaurants
take
may be
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maybe
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ninetee
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nineteen
ninety
percent
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, while
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
take
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ten
percent
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per cent
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. So
that is
my opinion why
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should not
to
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apply
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rise the
tax
to
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on
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fast
food
.
To
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conclusion want to say that fast
food
is normal but not so often. I think that
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy food
  • junk food
  • calorie-dense
  • taxing
  • incentivize
  • manufacturers
  • prohibitively expensive
  • disproportionately
  • low-income households
  • healthcare costs
  • obesity
  • diet-related diseases
  • punitive measures
  • lifestyle choices
  • government intervention
  • food industry
  • economic impact
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