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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in vacant areas of cities and towns, while others say housing facilities should be made instead. -Do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental conditions are changing drastically due to human activities.It is argued that It is better to plant more
trees
 in unoccupied
city
 areas
instead
 of construction ,
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however
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 some people think oppositely. In my perspective, conserving nature in
city
 space is even more important than building more infrastructure and I will support
this
 idea in upcoming paragraphs. Admittedly, more buildings can accommodate more residents,
hence
 more people come to explore new opportunities, which will help in a
city
's growth.But It is
also
 the fact that crowded places require more oxygen and fresh air,
therefore
 greenery
also
 has equal importance as other frameworks.
Moreover
 , urban folks have
a
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hectic
schedules
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 due to their fast-paced lifestyles, so to overcome stress it is better to spend some time with nature which
further
bowl
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 down to grow more and more
trees
 or parks in the vicinity. Taking
this
 discussion
further
,
trees
 are not only helpful on a
city
 level or an individual level, but it is
also
 the most important need of the hour as global warming is increasing at its level best worldwide.Big metropolitan cities have a lot of industries which produce harmful chemicals and other gases,
therefore
 one cannot ignore the fact that a
city
 needs even more
trees
 than any other small town in order to clean the air.
For example
, less greenery in a
city
 increases pollution which potentially can create a lot of problems for dwellers resulting in more loads to
city
 medical facilities. In conclusion, infrastructure makes cities beautiful but nature
also
 has beauty in itself which provides a healthy life to residents.Constructing new buildings and growing
trees
 should go parallel to build a perfect dream
city
.
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