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Topic: It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents . Do you agree or disagree .

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College
 is the time in
one
's
life
 which makes
one
 ready to face the job market in future.The skills learnt here will make children the torch bearer of tomorrow. There are different opinions on whether
college
 students should live far away from
home
 or live at
home
 with their
parents
 . In the forthcoming ,paragraphs we will examine the two perspectives.
To begin
 with, most people consider that during
college
 days
one
 should stay with
parents
. The opinion is supported by the view that just out of school,
college
 is a starking change for kids and
parents
' support helps them to adjust to the new environment , deal with the anxiety which comes with change and provide a better environment to study . ,
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 it is believed that under the observation of
parents
 the child is prevented to go into the wrong company and often kept away from devils like gambling , drugs etc.
This
 ensures they lead a much more disciplined
life
 and are more focussed on their goals . ,
Also
 the nutritious food provided at
home
also
 ensures that the health of the child is not sacrificed at any point.
Although
 the advantages of staying with
parents
 at
home
 while studying in
college
 cannot be ruled out, In my opinion for a better development of personality it becomes of paramount importance that
one
 lives far away from
home
 in
college
 days. As a popular saying goes ,
Life
 begins at the end of a comfort zone .Live
life
 at
home
 is very comfortable and often prevents
one
 to fight and face the hardships of real
life
 . ,
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 opportunity to live alone in
college
 gives me a chance to deal with these difficulties and rise as an ultimate winner . In the
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process
one
 learns the art of adjusting to the real world.
One
also
 learns and develops a lot as a human being by being in the company of different cultured people. Group studies, assignment and bonding with friends
also
 increases once we stay away from
home
. Since there are no emotional attachments , our goal becomes our only focus. Most importantly we learn the skill of being independent. To hammer the
last
 nail, I would like to conclude that it is better to stay away from
home
 during
one
's
college
 days as it gives an opportunity for
one
 to be independent and live outside
one
's comfort zone.
This
 prepares us for the world we are about to face after
college
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