Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other subjects and therefore should be given more time in the calendar. Do you agree or disagree?

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I think that for some people subjects arts,
music
and drama are more important,
therefore
they want to pay attention only to that, and some people disagree with
this
opinion. In
this
essay, I want to discuss and explain my point of view.
Firstly
, I think that if a person is good at art or
music
than at other subjects,
then
she has a chance to make up a good career.
For instance
, I have a sister who did not want to teach academic subjects but was better at drawing.
However
, she may not be able to do well in school exams, but she was very good at drawing and had enough skills in drawing.
Therefore
, she decided to enter the University where she taught art and want to open her popular gallery.
As a result
, my sister may not be an engineer or something, but she may do her job better and maybe
this
job will bring her success in later life. To some ,extent these interests help people to self-knowledge.
In other words
, being engaged in streams, like dance and
music
bring out the hidden talents in a person.
For example
, dancing in some forms helps to develop a healthy mindset and can be given different sounds and rhythms.
Consequently
, that self-knowledge helps them reduce their aggressive nature. In conclusion, I guess that everyone can individually go to circles and develop there. For
this
one does not need to offer a lot of time for art or
music
, since
this
is a person's sympathy for
this
subject.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stimulate creativity
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Emotional and social benefits
  • Self-expression
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global citizenship
  • Balanced education
  • Diverse career paths
  • Stress reduction
  • Mental well-being
  • Talent nurturing
  • Substantial career opportunities
  • Arts-based subjects
  • Confidence building
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