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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime drama are becoming more and more popular. why do You think this? what is Your opinion of crime fiction and crime dramas

#countries #crime #novels #tv #drama #fiction #dramas
In the modern world,
for
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ordinary
people
, criminals and detectives are becoming interesting and
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generous
genious
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genius
 persons. Everyone attracts to a side, depending on their point of view. The readers
absorbs
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to
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a fancy book about them, and the watchers drown
in to
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 a dramatic TV series about a
crime
 or a detective story. By the way, I
strongly
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 influenced by these
type
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 of stories and follow them.
This
 attraction appears because they are not like them in their life but want to be in their imagination.
Therefore
,
crime
 novels or TV
crime
 dramas
absorbs
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 them to it. In older years,
people
 have experienced more
crime
 in the streets which
make
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 them
disguss
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discuss
 it.
The robbery
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was
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happened more often due to the lack of CCTVs. In the
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countryside
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country side
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, murdering enemies was not unusual and police couldn't figure out the murderer easily.
However
, In the newer generation,
this
 kind of assault and rage, have been degraded. But it
have
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 stayed in their genes. Today,
this
 genre of books or TV shows
are
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 just filling social's free
times
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. It has
an
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adventurous and
an exciting scenes
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exciting scenes
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 which
glu
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glue
people
 to the pages or the screen.
Moreover
, For that period of time, they flow to an imaginary world where they could be the main character. They could rob a bank and
then
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run away
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runaway
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, or be the detective that
capture
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 the lord of the drug in their neighbourhood. In my opinion, imagining doing
this kind
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these kinds
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 of
activities
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activity
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are
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is
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 better than doing them physically. In summary, due to the
increasing
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 of safety and peace in the world, acts of
crime
 are decreasing. Many countries are becoming more and more fond of
crime
 stories. Some
people
likes
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 to read them
on
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in
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the
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book, and some
craves
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for
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a love story that involves criminals in it. I find it
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plausible
plausable
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plausible
 to spend time
to watch
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 an action genre with
the
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 hint of drama.
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