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The worldwide population of children aged 15 and younger is rising. What are the current and future advantages and disadvantages for countries with this kind of growth?

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The proportion of youth who are 15 years old and below has risen recently globally in recent years. There are some benefits and drawbacks regarding it and in
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 I will examine those properly. Starting with two strong points of having a large number of youth, namely a large workforce and economic growth. regarding the
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 benefit, increasing the younger population obviously leads to
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. It is a fact that as the number of workers
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 up the earnings will be declined.
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, China and India which are considered to have the cheapest workers around the world are the two countries with the most quantity of people. Taking a look into the
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 benefit, the development of a nation completely depends on the taxes paid by its people.
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, as the number of people grows the amount of taxes given will rise which will result in the improvement of a community using tax income to fund greater projects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Demographic Dividend
  • 2. Dependency Ratio
  • 3. Workforce
  • 4. Economic Growth
  • 5. Innovation
  • 6. Sustainable Development
  • 7. Social Services
  • 8. Natural Resources
  • 9. Healthcare Systems
  • 10. Education Systems
  • 11. Employment Challenges
  • 12. Environmental Conservation
  • 13. Public Infrastructure
  • 14. Social Unrest
  • 15. Technological Progress
  • 16. Cultural Vibrancy
  • 17. Investment
  • 18. Resource Scarcity
  • 19. Effective Governance
  • 20. Social Stability
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