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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem? Problem and solution

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A large number of wild
animals
 are vanishing over the years and some of them are on the threatened list.
This
 happens mainly due to hunting and overpopulation.
However
, there are a number of solutions that ought to be implemented to deal with these problems. It become very common these days that
people
 are hunting
animals
 cruelly, it is like a trend and a hobby for some
people
. They visit the jungles and kill
animals
 in order to fulfil their hobbies
that
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 is causing a big issue for
animals
.
Consequently
, due to
the
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less
awareness
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 and improper principles the species are dying and becoming extinct. Another issue is
construction
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 of building and demolishing of
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forest lands .when land
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in
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used
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 for
public
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with
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building
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 and other resources,
animals
 move to
some
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other areas which are not suitable for them and they
loss
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 their lives. A recent study showed that many
animals
 started walking between
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public areas and due to
fears
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 in
people
, local
people
 kill them to save their lives.
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 a number of steps can be taken to tackle
this
 problem.
First
 and foremost the government has to take full responsibility
of
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 the wildlife they have to restrict hunting and give punishment
to
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them
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 who disobey the rules. Another possible solution is that awareness among
people
. There is no doubt that human impact is the key factor contributing to
make
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 the situation worse.
Therefore
, rising awareness
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people
 is the wisest and most sustainable solution. In conclusion, the reasons behind wild
animals
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 extinction can be
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tackle
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 by government roles regarding their limitations and educating
people
 about their importance in our environment.
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