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Some people think that the education system should only focus on preparing students for employment, while others believe it has other important functions. Discuss both sides and then give your own opinion.

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Many
people
 feel that getting pupils ready for their careers should be
main
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 focus of
schools
,
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whereas
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where as
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 others believe that
schools
 should have additional purposes.
This
 essay discusses both sides of
this
 argument and
then
 I will give my own perspective. There are merits of
schools
 only focusing on preparing young
people
 for their working lives. If young
people
 are better prepared for their careers they will be more successful in their working lives. As well as
this
, they will
also
 make more money and be able to support themselves better. To illustrate, some recent stories in the media highlighted that
students
 who finish high school are less likely to be unemployed, and more likely to earn higher salaries.
In addition
, by
schools
 preparing young
people
 for
jobs
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 there will be a
better prepared
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 workforce.
This
 benefits
society
 by raising productivity and ensuring that employers have the necessary
labor
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 they need.
However
, there are
also
 advantages of
schools
 having other functions.
First
 of all, they should teach
students
 skills to make them well-rounded. By teaching communication skills and how to use technology the
students
 will be
better rounded
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 individuals. Clearly, these are important skills in today’s
society
 and so they should be learnt at school. As well as
this
schools
 should teach morals and ethics because
this
 will make
the
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society
 better. Many
people
 feel that
this
 aspect of schooling has become neglected, and has led to a deterioration of
society
. in conclusion, I believe both sides of the argument have their merits. On balance,
however
, it seems that
schools
 should have other functions.
This
 is because if the
students
 are well-rounded they will be more successful in their lives and contribute more to
society
.
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