Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and wether they are married or single some people say that this information may be relavant and useful.Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your openion.

Some human resource hiring personnel inquire about
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data of job seekers and believe that
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information
is worth and useful for selections and others disagree for the same. I believe that asking
personal
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information
will have both positive and negative impacts on the selection process and
this
should only be useful and
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relevant
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relevant
for highly demanded
jobs
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opinion
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personal interests
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behaviours
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the behaviours
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of an individual.
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someone
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some one
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someone
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is like to engage in group games
such
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volleyball
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volleyball
, that individual character is more likely to be a good team worker.
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, if a job demands
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teamwork
team works
teamworks
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teamwork
, selectors can easily filter
such
individuals among many
candidates
with basic qualifications.
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, personal
information
will be useful and
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relevant
to select
candidates
with some good qualities out of
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set of similar
candidates
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the other hand hobbies and interests cannot be certified or witnessed.
That is
job seekers can
manupulate
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manipulate
their own interests according to the demands of the
jobs
. In
such
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employers may mislead if they rely on
such
information
to make decisions and they may end up with
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set of
candidates
.
Therefore
, asking
personal
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information
from
candidates
can
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lead to
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the selection process and may have negative impacts on the selections.
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I believe that asking
personal
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for personal
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information
is only required for highly demanded
jobs
, where there are many
candidates
with
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set of basic qualifications and personal
informations
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should not be asked for low demanded
jobs
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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