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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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The world is changing drastically with the development of infrastructure and technology, so developing and developed countries expand their construction building in vast areas.
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, the construction is done in cities creating
houses
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 according to the flats method and building
houses
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 to spread around the
land
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. I believe, building
houses
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 in taller
buildings
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 is the best solution for various factors
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 as environmental preservation and economic growth. The following essay will explain the aforementioned views with examples. Building
houses
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 in sky-scrapping
buildings
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 will be advantageous for the environment because if the
houses
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 are built in vast areas the number of trees cut down is enormous,
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 more and more
land
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 pollution will occur around the area.
People
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 who prefer to live in flats or apartments will be able to save mother nature from being destroyed by construction companies or the government. According to research undertaken in the
UK
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 75% of the
land
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 is polluted due to
a
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the
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 number of
buildings
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 put up each year and
people
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 living in largely spread
houses
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 rather than tall
buildings
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.
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,
houses
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 which are built on huge
land
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 provide enough space for more than 3 families to live, which is a negative effect on the government and real estate owners. Where
people
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 won’t buy many
houses
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. Encouraging
people
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 to live in flats or tall
buildings
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houses
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 will enhance the economy of the country, due to
people
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 buying more apartments, where one family is able to live in one apartment. Imagine 3 families used to live in one house, now prefer to buy three apartments
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 will be a great benefit for the country. To conclude, cities creating taller
buildings
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 for housing not only protect the environment but
also
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 enhance the economic growth of the country.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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