Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some would argue that there should be severe
regulations
about
noise
pollution, while others say that they must be allowed to make the
noise
they desired. While some
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people
poeple
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people
believe they have the
right
to make strong sounds as much as they want, I believe there should be stronger
regulations
to monitor the
amount
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of
noise
people
are producing. On the one hand, many citizens think they have the
right
of yelling and
hearing
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loud
music
during the
day
because they wanted or like it.
Firstly
, some
people
feel excited by hearing loud hi-hop
music
and they do not care about time or others
neighboors
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neighbours
that might be
disturbing
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by
this
noise
.
Also
, these individuals believe that having a house
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them the
right
to do and hear wherever they want.
For instance
, In
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Angeles California most of the
people
are coming from Latino Community that like to hear really loud
music
during the
day
, and sometimes the police department
do
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not attend these calls to give them some
regulations
.
However
, I believe
this
should not be
this
way because there are a lot of
people
who work
night
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shift, and they really need to rest at home.
On the other hand
, some individuals strongly believe there should be stronger
regulations
on controlling the amount of
noise
a person
make
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during the
day
and night because
this
is
people
's
right
.
Moreover
, it is vital to have a pleasant rest at night and during the
day
because there are many children who need to study and they need to focus on
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assignments
assigments
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.
Also
, it is well-known that keeping
low
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level of
noise
help to improve
people
's mental health. To explain
further
, in Anaheim high-heels California, there are strict
regulations
for society who live there, and they must follow a schedule
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9:00 am to 7:00 pm that allows them to hear moderate volume
music
, and outside
this
period of time, they are not allowed to produce any
noise
. I believe
this
is apreferable way of living because they have control of
noise
pollution, and
this
allow them to have peace at home.
Although
so many citizens believe they can produce the
noise
they want, I believe they should be stronger
regulations
to control the amount of
noise
a person can make because
this
directly affect
people
's performance.
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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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