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There is not doubt these days that teaching history is beginning to become less and less and some of the children do not love it . The question is . Why do I believe it is crucial to teach children the past ? And what is going to be the impact if children are not taught history ?

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 I am going to write why it is important to study the past and what will happen if children have not studied it. We can say that we always take our strong and powerful from our
history
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parents
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 and the main reason given to support
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 have fought other people, and the colonists and how they
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 to maintain our country , we can feel how strong are us ,and we ought to be more careful to protect our country , and our
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 , and complete what people before us have done . For illustrate, I can see now how angry
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Libyan civilians
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 anyone thinks even
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 about our
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 .
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 , if they have not been taught the
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 and the conflicts that our
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 have clashed
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 situation will not be like that .
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 them considering they will feel weak usually .
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, they are not going to have knowledge
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 where they come
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 they are not able to have patriotism . In conclusion . I would rather
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say that children have to know their
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 and they should have loyalty
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 it because by it they are going to be more strong .
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, they must be taught just the important periods in the past and not deeply .

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