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Some people believe that educational qualifications will always bring success in life. Other people say that educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Introduction
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 educated
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 are highly respected
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 our society. But One group of
people
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argue that
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argues that
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academic
acadamic
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academic
 achievement
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 more success while
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others
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 disagree.in
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 will discuss both
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 of
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Body paragraph 1
Education is
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very
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very
 important
us
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 to achieve our goals. In
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 we learnt
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so many
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 as maths science.
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When
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 we learn science and maths
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 our logical thinking skills. And
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 develop our
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skill
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problem
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 us to solve that problem. When we educate well we can find a good job.
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 we can get
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 salary.
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,
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can't find
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job
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. So he got
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 salary.
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 he want to work hard.
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then
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people
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 need to learn.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,some
people
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 think
acadamic
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academic
achievment
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achievement
 can improve life better.
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they
bthey
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They
 earn money using
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this
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 skills.
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,
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 famous
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newnton
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newton
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who
how
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who
 dropout the
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school
achool
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school
.but
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 his methods for scientists. Not only
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bill gates
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but billgates steve also
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jobes
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 are
famous
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a famous
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person
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don't
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 get higher
studise
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studies
. But
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they
that
thay
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they
 are
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famous
 and they have good
walth
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health
. And
also
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 they are
successful
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person
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people
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Conclusion
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, indiquait educate
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are
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keep their name bright place in history. But that method
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 not
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success
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 for all the
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believe
beleve
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believe
 education is very important for us. It bright our life nicely

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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