In the future, it may be scientifically possible for people to live for 150 years. This could be good for individuals but it may have negative consequences for society. What are the benefits and risks of people living to 150

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, I need
management
skills for my future occupational planning. Looking back
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last
six
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of career path, I am a highly skilled video maker who can perform perfectly with any video production job assigned to me. But
management
is my soft spot. My versatile video production abilities provide me with the power to finish a project without anyone else’s help, and they
also
encourage me to stop cooperating with other people and stop
practicing
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my
management
skills. Under
such
circumstance
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, I could not change my work pattern without other people’s help. Even though I have working experience
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managing a team and teaching students, practical experience only won’t be that efficient to teach myself how to manage people. I need a guidance and systematic learning process to help me strengthen my
management
skills. The
last
but not the least,
besides
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my career path study,
management
also
help
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my daily life and my
family
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education. I have a
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new born
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girl, and of
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I want to provide the best I can to feed her and educate her. In my mind, the most efficient family education method is to be a qualified role model.
This
is why I need to walk out of the “Tang Ping” lifestyle, which will pose a negative impact on my daughter’s growth. Learning
management
will not only set
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a great study role model to her but
also
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to communicate with her better. I can use my knowledge to teach her how to manage her time,
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to manage her life properly, I can
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method to guide and influence her when things
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wrong.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • longevity
  • life expectancy
  • scientific advancements
  • experience
  • personal goals
  • loved ones
  • knowledge
  • wisdom
  • contributions
  • advancements
  • fear of death
  • appreciation for life
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