Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, increasing

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fuel's

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fuel

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cost

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wouldn't be effective to solve environmental issues.

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, I strongly disagree with

this

trying

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solution.

In addition

, other reasons are included in

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unbalance,

such

as the deforest,

agropecuary

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, humans, etc.

First

of all, even with the war between Russia and Ukraine, people didn't stop buying fuel, but they were complaining about the high prices and still using it.

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of all, the car's engines have been changed to hybrid and electric cars, which helps

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the

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some of the issues. Said that, would be a good action by the factors to reduce the price of these types of cars.

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, more encouragement through the government (Public Policies),

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and business

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business

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businesses

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(marketing) to people starting to ride bikes, take the bus, or just walk to their destinations,

instead

of using the car.

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, the high demand for meat, eggs and dairy products

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humans,

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been contributing to increase the

deforestation

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in deforestation

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, with

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plain land, the farmers or factories can raise more

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animals, like cows, goats, pigs,

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and chicken

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chicken

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. These animals

also

pollute the land, rivers and the air

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large

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a large

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scale.

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the other hand, another problem starts with the pollution that each person makes

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by not throwing

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trash properly.

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action impacts the whole cycle of nature. The system

improve

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an environmental imbalances

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environmental imbalances

an environmental imbalance

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Therefore

, changing other sectors of life would help

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Mother Nature, it would bring more health to the populations on Earth, and people should have more growth and a wider community.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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environmental sustainability
renewable energy
fossil fuels
public transportation
carbon footprint
economic incentives
alternative energy vehicles
fuel-efficient
government subsidies
economic disparity
urban planning
rural infrastructure
sustainable development
carbon tax
green technology
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