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Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
Nowadays, increasing
the
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fuel's
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fuel
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cost
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costs
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 wouldn't be effective to solve environmental issues.
Thus
, I strongly disagree with
this
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of
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solution.
In addition
, other reasons are included in
this
 unbalance,
such
 as the deforest,
agropecuary
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Agropecuario
, humans, etc.
First
 of all, even with the war between Russia and Ukraine, people didn't stop buying fuel, but they were complaining about the high prices and still using it.
Second
 of all, the car's engines have been changed to hybrid and electric cars, which helps
solving
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the
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some of the issues. Said that, would be a good action by the factors to reduce the price of these types of cars.
Additionally
, more encouragement through the government (Public Policies),
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and business
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business
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businesses
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 (marketing) to people starting to ride bikes, take the bus, or just walk to their destinations,
instead
 of using the car.
Furthermore
, the high demand for meat, eggs and dairy products
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humans,
have
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 been contributing to increase the
deforestation
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in deforestation
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.
Thus
, with
a
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plain land, the farmers or factories can raise more
farmer's
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 animals, like cows, goats, pigs,
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and chicken
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chicken
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chickens
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. These animals
also
 pollute the land, rivers and the air
in
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large
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a large
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 scale.
In
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 the other hand, another problem starts with the pollution that each person makes
everyday
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 by not throwing
the
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trash properly.
This
 action impacts the whole cycle of nature. The system
improve
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an environmental imbalances
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environmental imbalances
an environmental imbalance
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.
Therefore
, changing other sectors of life would help
the
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Mother Nature, it would bring more health to the populations on Earth, and people should have more growth and a wider community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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