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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

#travel #places #cultures #people #books #films #internet
You do not have to go to
another
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another place
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places
 to learn about the lifestyle of
people
 living in
another
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other
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people
.
This
 is can
learned
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learn
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 from books, films and the
internet
.
This
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 essay I will explore both sides.
Then
 I will give my view. On the one hand,
traveling
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travelling
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 to
another
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another place
other places
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places
 and knowing their way of life and their religion
that
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is good.
Therefore
, it gives them many opportunities. Every person really
want
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 to visit
other area
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another area
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that
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to eat their famous food and to see beautiful
places
 in the real life.
For example
, if individuals go to distant
places
 that
people
 can imagine and feel what the culture and traditions of the country are and how they are presented in reality.
In addition
, they can experience
all
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it all
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 by themselves.
On the other hand
, using materials
such
 as books, movies and the
internet
 to discover various traditions worldwide is an effective method.especially,
the
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since the
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internet
 is developing day by day and with the coverage of the
internet
 in almost every corner of the world,
people
 can easily approach to a wide range of online information. Knowing about any area in the world does not take much time, money or energy.
For example
, a person who works in his country can not go to another state due to can not leave his job. In conclusion, it is essential to visit
around
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different regions of the globe to learn about cultural variations. I think every person
travel
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travels
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 around the world
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Authentic experiences
  • Cultural immersion
  • Sensory learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Language barriers
  • Interpersonal interactions
  • Balanced approach
  • Virtual tours
  • Lived experiences
  • Credibility of sources
  • Misconceptions
  • Multicultural competency
  • Stimulate curiosity
  • Digital platforms
  • Stereotypes
  • Environmentally sustainable
  • Hands-on experience
  • Global perspective
  • Biased information
  • Cultural nuances
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