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Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice?

Today, there is so much processed
food
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 in the market for customers to select from.
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, numerous people prefer pre-cooked
meals
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 rather than cooking in their houses.
This
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reason
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reasons
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 contributing to
this
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 phenomenon is
the
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that the
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populaces
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are
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is
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 busy in their daily life, given that saving
time
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 is the chief merit
and
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, and
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 insufficient nutrients are the prime demerit. More people are
abundant
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overloaded
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 with tasks needed to complete either in their life or job, so several crowds are inclined to have microwaved
food
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 in a short
time
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 of preparation.
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, making any fresh meal is obliged to spend
time
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 grocery shopping and purchasing fresh ingredients.
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, it occupies too much
time
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 to prepare for cooking at home.
For instance
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, my mother just needs 10 minutes to heat a piece of frozen pizza
but
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, but
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 spends at least thirty minutes
to make
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making
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hot
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a hot
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 lunch. There are several positive effects of consuming
ready-preparation
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ready-prepared
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food
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.
Firstly
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, no need to spend too much
time
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 is the main reason to digest processed
meals
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.
Secondly
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, frozen
food
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 can
keep
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 in the refrigerator for a longer
time
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, so as to reduce the
time
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 to go to a supermarket.
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, my mother only went to Costco to buy some precooked
food
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 once per month
due to
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 her busy schedule.
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,
time
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-saving and conserving
prolonged
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apply
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food
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 are two favour consequences
to have
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of having
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 ready-made
food
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.
In contrast
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, a couple of adverse effects are caused by eating prepared
meals
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.
To begin
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 with, plenty of vitamins are lost in frozen
food
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 because they are hard to preserve.
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, it is detrimental for people to consume too many microwaved
meals
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.
In addition
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, some processed
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food
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foods
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comprises
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contain
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 redundant savoury spices in order to
emphasize
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 the flavour, which is not good for our health. To cite an example, one survey conducted by a nutritionist indicates that a frozen chicken nugget has one more volume of salt than a fresh chicken nugget.
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, the reduced amount of nutrition and surplus savoury ingredients are disadvantageous
effects
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to
eat
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eating
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 pre-cooked dishes. In conclusion, the prominent cause of having fast-cooked cuisine is the public
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along
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, along
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 with a full
of
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workload of
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workable
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tasks.
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, utilising little
time
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 to prepare a daily meal and ingredients is a positive outcome without cooking fresh dishes, but not enough balanced diets are a dominant concern for having a frozen dish.

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structure
Make the task easier to see. Start with a clear view in the intro and finish with a simple end.
linking
Link ideas with plain words. Use words like first, also, but, for example to help flow.
grammar
Use short, clean sentences. Some lines are long and hard. Break them up.
examples
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task
Be sure to answer both parts of the question: why it happens and the good and bad side.
structure
The start shows the big idea and has a plan.
content
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structure
The essay ends with a closing idea.
Your opinion

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